Free Choice Writing-Oscar W
Persuade, Entertain or Inform?
I am learning to communicate my ideas effectively to the reader.
You choose the topic and you choose the writing purpose. This needs to be your best independent writing for assessment. Below is the success criteria for quality writing. Use this criteria and go for it!
Success Criteria (Sentence formation has been our main focus)
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Content & Ideas
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Include a range of ideas with clear details.
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Sentence Formation
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Vocabulary
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Choose words and language features to meet my purpose.
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Structure
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Clear beginning, middle and end with paragraphs.
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Spelling
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My best spelling with good attempts at words I don’t know.
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Punctuation
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Use all basic punctuation (capital letters, full stops, question marks and exclamation marks) correctly and attempt some complex punctuation.
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THE ABANDONED SCHOOL
Me, Cam, Amos,Rory and Brayden planned to go to a ABANDONED school it was very scary that we were going. At parkvale we planned it there so I said have a torch,wenpen,bag and black clothes. We get our black bikes and ride off to the abandoned school we were very nervous. So we arrived at the HUGE SCHOOL.
It was so big like movie world I was like what the heck am I doing.
So we got in there so much glass that every foot step we did there was gikling. Everyone went to room 5 and they said this room is very casual because the radio was going so we were listening to the beats in room 5.
We got in the office it was very very creepy because the lights was itching so we got out of that room quick what I mean is very quick. We font there was a ghost was behind us but it was the cold air. Then we moved to room 21
Oh my gosh there is a horse in here. We better run for
Our life guys the HORSE is going to KILL us oh no.
Here goes the horse again and it has stop chasing
us so that was great and now we don’t have to
Worry about the horse. Now we got to the toilets
It sitck like poo. at the last toilets I saw a GHOST
Oh no then I turned around and no one was there they must of
dich me so I ran aroud the whole school and I didn’t find them.
And now I have to go in the rooms in head why did we plan this
This was the stupidist idea I have in my life. I went to room 1 and they were in there and I said to them why did you ditch me because it was going to be funny. Then I said no it wasn’t funny guys now we have to go back the toiltes they say ooook lets go boys then we get there we where sared for our lifes then we when to the the LAST TOILTES oh no run for your lifes. In my head I said there
Was there was no ghost so went back there we got at the last toilte now guys get ready to run nope we don’t have to run now.
That was the end of the toiltes said” brayden. Cameron said I won’t food ok I said then we see the horse again all of as say the hores is still here no we think we will leave the
School now so lets ran for our lifes buddys. We got out of the school but I trope my wolite
So I said we have to get it Amos says not nowww and I said yes now and I see I right beside the fece so I pick it up now lets go home boys. We got back home And… The door was opneing
And closing So I went to Amos house And the same thing was happing to him now I went back to my house And went to sleep and no bad derams.
THE END!!!
I am proud of this because I tried my hardest and my best. This is one of my favourite writing tasks I have done this year so far. I think I did my best in this free choice writing task.
HOPE YOU LIKE IT :)